I wrote this for school last week.
A girl was sleeping peacefully on a small, reed mat. Suddenly she opened her brown eyes. The sun was just rising. She jumped up off the mat, combed her hair with her fingers, snatched a bucket up and walked out the tent flap. She looked around to see who else was up. Seeing no one, she started walking at a quick pace, glancing around her. She spotted a boy. He had a bucket too. She smiled and waved at him. He smiled and waved back. He fell into step beside her. They both where going to the same place. The girl glanced at the boy, the boy back. They started running, slowly at first, but steadily they grew faster and faster. The buckets were swinging wildly in their hands, hitting the air and their legs. They turned a corner and saw their destination. The girl tried to go faster. The boy tried too. They were both breathing hard, but neither was willing to let up. They were close to the finish line. They made it and stumbled to a stop. They looked at each other, faces red, breathing hard. Then they looked down at the well. “I won.” said the boy. The girl looked at him and said, “Almost.” Then she took her bucket and drew some water from the well. She looked up at the boy one more time, smiled and walked back to her camp.

snpnmnmi Said:
on September 13, 2007 at 7:13 pm
Nice! Here from a homeschooling tag at wordpress… someone is very proud of you!
Have fun writing.
shangrilewis Said:
on September 14, 2007 at 3:04 pm
I followed a homeschooling tag, too.
I loved the part about the buckets hitting your legs. It’s those details that bring your reader into your work. Good Job!